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Dec 30, 2018
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Autumn Flower
There she lay in the wild
baring her virgin charm
squirming in the passionate breeze
seducing the flirting aphids
with her scent and vibrant form
to mate and sate her nascent desire
and in the aftermath
feel blessed and overwhelmed
with a moist drop at dawn
sparkling her maidenhood.
There she lay
dreaming of offspring
warming her womb.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Rula
6 years 6 months ago
Raj
There is a great use of imagery, and personification in this.
I have nothing to suggest but much appreciation!
Always great to read you!
raj
6 years 6 months ago
Thanks Rula
for your good words.
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Rula
6 years 6 months ago
One query though
Wonder why should it be an (autumn) flower.
raj
6 years 6 months ago
Autumn Flower because
Autumn Flower because "conceived in Autumn and progeny in Off[Spring]"
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Rula
6 years 6 months ago
Thanks
For the clarification dear raj... I see now the playing with the words too. Very clever as I said.
BTW... This piece deserves more audience to appreciate.
lovedly
6 years 6 months ago
i always love to
but he doesn't like my words
play
what I mean by
lay
so
I now stay away
raj
6 years 6 months ago
Thanks Rula
It's a choice ...those who find time to read and respond I appreciate...those who don't find it worth it I have no regrets...
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