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May 19, 2014
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Awaiting to be married
Happy landing
off the spring board of spring
may be in Autumn or Winter
may marriage happiness
to you bring
see all is in money
had you any
you
wouldn't have waited
for spring
Autumn or Winter snow
and
now hope all well with you does go...
see all is about money....
only money teaches...
richness and poverty ....
ask all those who live
Below The Poverty Line
I note with a heavy
though happier heart
some do get a lovelier hearth
,money apart
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
11 years 1 month ago
hey loved
Must not be All about the money because even this man of little means manage to find a wonderful woman to marry lol. You might give some thought to deleting the last line then read this and see if that line is missed.........stan
loved
11 years 1 month ago
hi Stan
the concept of
.....'''even this man of little means ...'''
I don't accept ...as your concept of '''little '''varies with mine
but the intended deletion
I shall refine
done it go
do see!
loved
11 years 1 month ago
post script
I note with a heavy
though happier heart
some do get a lovelier hearth
,money apart