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Jun 11, 2012
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Awake to Reality
Me: reality junkie;
Hollywood: sells lies;
Water in my eyes:
'Cause it smells so funky.
Power off - TV dies;
A breath of fresh air, a few deep sighs;
Shoulders relaxed, check out your back - no more monkey.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction: How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Candlewitch
13 years 4 months ago
Hello Matt,
I like the theme immensely! This write gave me a huge smile! I like the thought that when you turn off the tv that it dies and the monkey goes away. Great poem over all!
always, Cat
p.s.
my addiction is ps3 games
Ian.T
13 years 4 months ago
Matt
I could complain about the continued repeats of TV programmes but don't.
Main TV programmes have a select button called on/off
It is the best control there is lol Great theme,
You put as free verse?? is that correct?? seeing that the whole thing is linked by rhyme, the odd couplet and then though I can't think who the organ grinder is you talk of a monkey to rhyme with the first line, lol,
Yours Ian.T