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Barbara Writes
Barbara Writes
Jun 16, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Bad Girls

Bad girls, bad girls
Whatcha gonna do, gonna do today

Steal a van from a friend
Break a car window
Bad girls, bad girls
Whatcha gonna do, gonna do today

Sell your phone for some dough
Gas up the van and go
Wreck in a blinding storm
Trying to get home
Bad girls, bad girls
Whatcha gonna do, gonna do today

Run away from the clatter
Leave the van in the canal
Hitch hike a ride with a traveler
Get home in time for a party
Bad girls, bad girls
Whatcha gonna do, gonna do today

Trick a man out of cash
Get money for some gas
Say you’ll meet him at his pad
Then go home and laugh
Bad girls, bad girls
Whatcha gonna do, gonna do today

About This Poem

Last Few Words: One of daughters inspired this write when she told about her, her cousin and her friend wild trip trying to get home from her friends boyfriend house in a blinding storm speeding too fast for rain conditions. I just shuck my head. The song is "bad boys bad boys what you gonna do when they come for you" i change the wording to fit my poem to "bad girls bad girls whatcha gonna do to day" they always doing something :)

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Billy Collins, Shakespeare, , Emily Dickinson, , , Whitman, Jess Tapper

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Comments

weirdelf

weirdelf

14 years 1 month ago

Wow, it's a different speed and write from you

I love the pace, almost intoxicated by it. But I am a male.

Consider your intention. Was it to shame or perhaps a bit of envy for that wild youthfulness?

As it stands it is a beautiful, wild, amoral picture, the word bad becomes good.

This poem doesn't really stand alone, I see it as part of your body of work.

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

14 years 1 month ago

Hey Jess

i am not sure what your question is but, My intentions was never to shame anyone but to express the wildness of a group of girls having fun and would do almost anything to accomplished a goal. as for me i was reserved and never experience such wild fun or been around girls that were having wild fun. I'm not envy ,but is fascinated by it. so i wrote it in a poem.

there are some things i rather not experience, but would like to understand why some find it an amazing time in their youth.

R

raj

13 years 10 months ago

Barbara

wild thoughts about bad girls expressed by a good girl :) I had fun reading this one...

lou

lou

13 years 9 months ago

Hi

I like the theme of two girls on the rampage. But there there are two little things,the repeatition of 'bad girls, bad girls,' is very much like the lines from an old song, i don't know who sang it, but the lines said 'bad boys, bad boys, what ya gonna do'? Plus i think the second Stanza would sound better without the repeats the word van.

Apart from that, i think it is a very well written poem and i enjoyed it .

Lou

Barbara Writes

Barbara Writes

13 years 9 months ago

hey Lou

thanks for reading and sharing you suggestions. i will make some changes.
the repetition of the words bad girls did come from the song bad boys. I will reread and see how i can rewrite van .