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Eduardo Cruz
Eduardo Cruz
May 22, 2019 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

The balance

The Dragon
creature of fire and smoke
burning all
where ever it goes

The Butterfly
creature of flowers and sun
pollinating all
where ever it goes

it was the butterfly
who taught the dragon
how to fly

it was the dragon
who taught the butterfly
how to survive

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

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Comments

S

scribbler

6 years 1 month ago

Hi Eddie

I tried my best to find a suggestion for improvement but came up empty. Maybe some of the free verse specialists can be of some assistance. BTW i liked this...stan

Race_9togo

Race_9togo

6 years 1 month ago

Hey Eddie,

No criticism, except it too short!
But...just appreciation. Simple, direct, and deep.
Good stuff man.

Seren

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Ello :)

I hope you're ok I have missed you old friend

I agree with Jim it's too short But I love it!!

love and hugs xxx

Seren

Seren

2 years 5 months ago

Ello :)

I hope you're ok I have missed you old friend

I agree with Jim it's too short But I love it!!

love and hugs xxx