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RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Aug 01, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the challenge:

Neopoet Random Challenge # 18

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At The Bar- Challenge #18

Closing time, only one left
Head down in a vodka escape
Sadness ebbed blood red
Through lifeless eyes

Twenty years flashed
Like a reel through time
Good deeds gone punished
No hope to find

Bartender says it's time to go
She lets out a sigh
One last sip and a final tear
Splinters against her despair

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 11 months ago

Nicely done

Last line there it’s “despair”

Other than that I think it’s pretty finished. You have a really good one here.

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 11 months ago

Thanks

For catching that typo! Going to make the change now.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

der RB,

a very fine answer to the challenge! I hope to come back to this tomorrow, as I'm whipped today.
it deserves a decent reading and answer.

*hugs, Cat
ever, eddy