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Bard of the Bunch
as he sat
eating his buttered toast
and doing the crosswords
listening to the birds
at the backyard feeder
twittering away
some as confident
as a newly signed pop singer
some less so
he wondered if they
had their own
trivia
if the feeder
was their water cooler
and some birds
recounted some great battle
from the seventh
or seventeenth century
or perhaps
a well known bird’s
well known sex life
he thought about
how man used to have
only oral traditions
and imagined
the musical meadowlark
as the bard of the bunch
stories passed down
from bird generation
to bird generation
tales that solidified
theirs as
the superior species
origin myths
and bird gods
and explanations
of the sun and the seasons
predator demons
and the gift of grain
and how the lucky ones
got to retire
for good
in Florida
or somewhere
more Southerly
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Comments
Breakinglogic
6 years 11 months ago
Interesting thought! If they
Interesting thought! If they aren't gossiping, then I don't know what they could be doing so loudly that can't wait until I am out of bed
gregwa8
6 years 11 months ago
:)
:)
chevyvent
6 years 11 months ago
there's a skill in your writing really made you think
Nicely done there's a skill in your writing really made you think. Strange I hear voices coming from the piece really good put together. Thank you for helping us stay close to reality very good work.
For example : "as he sat
eating his buttered toast
and doing the crosswords",
very thought provoking
gregwa8
6 years 11 months ago
thanks!
thanks!