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A Bard's Bad Luck
Sing to me Muse, of a day of your choosing
I hope it’s not rude, but somewhat amusing
We’ve all travelled far and await in suspense
As your bard I now ask, please commence.
The day was short but the sun still hot
A sundial displayed it was one o’clock
What happened that day was enough to shock
An Athenian man stole a cow and time stopped.
Helios’ rage on that short summer’s day
Had him fuming and musing over who should then pay
I alone know the culprit and surely, I’ll say
He is a giant in size with a scar on his face.
The scar in question is the shape of a bull
Six inches wide and not equally tall
It’s said he’s gifted with words and tells stories to all
And rarely goes hungry so is usually full.
Well, it may seem that my Muse is a rat
I have that scar on my face and I’m more than quite fat
Yes, I travel and talk and write as I walk
But muses can lie through their teeth, with eyes of a hawk.
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7 months 3 weeks ago
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Lavender
7 months 3 weeks ago
A Bard's Bad Luck
Hello, Michael!
What a clever, clever poem! A fun and fast-paced read. I did a little google-ing to catch up on Helios and his cattle, and I could still educate myself further, but well done! I tripped a little on the final line, but I don't have any suggestions to give to tighten it up. I'll return!
Thank you!
L
Michael Keens
7 months 3 weeks ago
Thanks. I'm studying classics
Thanks. I'm studying classics so this topic kinda fell in my lap. Yeah the final line is tough to make shorter. Will have a think.
Rula
6 months 4 weeks ago
Hello Michael K.
I so agree with Lavender. This is really clever!
I'm not sure if the flickering in the ending rhymes is intentional, still as I said a very amusing read.
Thank you for sharing.