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Jan 24, 2011
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A Bayliner Across Oceans
My my my looks like fun
speeding across ocean waters
over blue ripples
under summer sun
The cool wind mixed with warmth
blowing in my hair
under summer clouds
in a red and white boat screaming.
If only I weren't afraid
of the vast waters
enveloping my soul
taking away my breath
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Barbara Writes
14 years 5 months ago
Ian T
Thanks for the suggestions. I think they are good. The one about screaming loud would not describe me. In a situation like that I'm not screamer but is quiet, I would grab a hold of you burying my head the whole time. You could not pry me away lol.
Barbara Writes
14 years 5 months ago
Lol my my me
As usual I know nothing about everything. I've never been around a bay liner only seen on TV. I saw an add advertising one for sale on face book marketplace.and it look like fun. So I imagine fun and wrote about what it might feel like.
As you may have realize by now I don't follow conversations very well. A story of my life. Lol