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Oct 04, 2013
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To be happy.
Yes, really happy,
Gratuitous, unearned happiness
Yes I am happy.
It shakes me to my core
Perhaps frisson or tremble is a better word
It is rare
It is precious
I am delighted
And…
Above all
Perhaps the perfect thing,
I don’t fear its inevitable ending.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
11 years 9 months ago
Jess ,
A simple piece that carries a mood that I hope is infectious,
It is great to be happy, we shall not worry about it's inevitable end we will enjoy it while it is here,
Yours as always Ian.T
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
not all my infections are safe
but as far as I know happiness doesn't spread herpes or aids yet. No doubt the Chemical Warfare branch of the Catholic church is working on it.
loved
11 years 9 months ago
I observe a marked
sense of improved humor
I thought you only used
a guillotine
to practice on my neck
but happiness can be contagious
if it makes any difference
Ian.T
11 years 9 months ago
Jess
That Lonnie what is he on about Tail is that a typo or what????
Oxtail soup now there's a nice piece of tail, I wish he wouldn't talk in riddles there are enough vague poetic statements here as it is.
I was thinking about age things this morning like kisses, memory and many other things that become vague, I hope someone would let me know what happened to all those simply nice things I have a vague recollection of, even smiling LOL.
Take care Yours as always Ian.T
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
thanks
though I presume you read the last line.
Rula
11 years 9 months ago
an uplifting poem jess
Good for you.
I'd re-arrange the first three lines with a few changes for a more logical consistancy.
Yes, I am happy.
Really happy!
( A)Gratuitous, unearned happiness..............I liked the word "gratuitious"
You make me feel happy too
.
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
thanks Rula,
I am unclear about your suggestions
Rula
11 years 9 months ago
any clearer now?
after using the advanced formating
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
clearer
thanks.
Something interesting. Do you realise there was more a political/ideological content in that suggestion than a poetical one?
Rula
11 years 9 months ago
To be quite honest
I only cared for the logical consistancy when I suggested the re-arrangement of those lines
You might like to tell me how!
Lonnie
11 years 9 months ago
Well done
Glad to see the mood change, and I hope it brings you more peace of mind!
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
thanks lonnie
seems a strange incongruency to work for peace of mind,eh
Lonnie
11 years 9 months ago
Uh-huh
You mean as opposed to a piece of tail? LOL!!
Kailashana2
11 years 9 months ago
Indeed.
Indeed.
Joy is infectious. I am delirious.
~
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
hahah!
As an intrinsic atheist as I am I knew we had a connection.
Esker
11 years 9 months ago
Great Smile Mate!
a dazzler!
thank you!
Eduardo Cruz
11 years 9 months ago
Jess,
Interesting to see you have a mild emotional side, I am interested to see more writing of this nature from you.
"The cat is out of the bag!"
Eddie
weirdelf
11 years 9 months ago
thanks Steven and Eddie
yeah, it's quite a big change for me. Maybe even more to come,