THE BEACH

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The imagery in your poem "THE BEACH" is vivid and evocative, creating a sensory experience for the reader. The use of descriptive language like "Biscuit coloured," "rolling rushing turquoise waves," and "sheets of golden light rebounded off the sluggish warm highway sea" paints a clear picture of the beach scene. However, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened.

Consider paying attention to the structure and flow of the poem. The abrupt line breaks create a disjointed feeling at times, disrupting the reader's immersion in the imagery. Additionally, some phrases like "feet bars getting kissed" may benefit from clarification or rephrasing to enhance the overall coherence of the poem.

Furthermore, the poem could benefit from a more consistent use of punctuation to guide the reader through the imagery and create a smoother reading experience. Consider experimenting with punctuation marks like commas and periods to control the pace and rhythm of the poem.

Overall, your poem shows promise in its descriptive language

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This is wonderful poetry. I especially enjoyed the "weightless driftwood surfing endlessly." Poetic language and vivid imagery throughout.
Thank you!
L