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Aug 25, 2024
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Beach Day
"That look, right there!",
I point at her and accuse,
as I catch her smile before it fades.
With no further words between us
we walked down to the azure coast,
as I imagined shells on the beach,
and second cups of coffee before lunch.
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Rula
10 months 1 week ago
Hello Anthony
This is awesome capture of some romantic moments and the seeking for deeper connection! I'm left eager to know more.
P.s.I thought maybe this belongs more to the "Beach Day" contest?
Michael Anthony
10 months 1 week ago
Thanks Rula! I am always
Thanks Rula! I am always fascinated with poetry's ability to capture moments that seem so fleeting. I wasn't aware of that contest - oh well.
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Lavender
10 months 1 week ago
Beach Day
Hello, Michael,
A lovely reflection on something endearing that must have been spoken about before, is now happening in the moment, while looking forward to what delightful things are going to happen next. Enjoying and appreciating one another's company. Lovely.
Thank you!
L
Michael Anthony
10 months 1 week ago
Exactly L! Could not have
Exactly L! Could not have explained this piece better - glad you liked it.
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