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Jan 29, 2023
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Beautiful Eyes
There's beauty
in each one's eyes
so we see differently
to ensure
we don't dwell
in an indifferent
mundane world
we all are beautiful
humans
animals
birds
and
bees
About This Poem
Last Few Words: All eyes are beautiful
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
Bees have compound eyes
I wish that we could be a bee
A fuzzy wuzzy bumblebee
A buzzing bumbling bee we be
A-buzzing 'round a basswood tree
He-hee!
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
thanks Thomas
u r humorous
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
If we had compound eyes
We could see a lot more beauty...may be why bees are attracted by flowers. Now write a poem about flowers and bees.
Please.
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
Thomas
You can wear double glasses or carry Binoculars you will see better AHA
Triskelion
2 years 4 months ago
When I read
your poetry, it's like looking through a kaleidoscope.
May be like bees see....oui?
Thomas
lovedly
2 years 4 months ago
nice multi coloured did u mean ur eyes
thanks a tonnnneeeeeeeee
scribbler
2 years 5 months ago
Hi loved
Try it using each one's eyes instead of eye. Even an insect with compound vision has 2 eyes lol
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
Thanks Stan and Lav
for he edit I had it in mind ...but perhaps ignored the rhyme
Thanks ... this is what Neo is for
rgds
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Beautiful Eyes
Hello, Lovedly,
I agree with Stan - plural eyes in the second line, especially to go along with your title. So glad to look at the world through your inspiring poem and your "Beautiful Eyes."
Thank you!
Lav
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Lovely
I agree with all the above suggestions.
I think you could've expanded this made your poems world bigger.
I see you've changed that second line.
Well done.
Love and hugs Sis xxx
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
yes Seren
I am a Neo follower
Waiting a poem from you
aeons past by
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Read your messages. I sent
Read your messages. I sent you one hrs ago.
Jayne
lovedly
2 years 5 months ago
Great I shall wait
Let the world know ...an anony once lived
I must also know someone
another poem composed
before i ebbed...
Aussie sis