Beautiful you. My best poetry ever on Neopoets walls Thanks all Minor edit

a great reminder dear loved

If this was mine, (i wish i can write such a piece) I would consider the repetition of
the word pass,pass by,pass away,passers in S2 (but it is only me).

Thanks for sharing.

Only the Good Samaritan is truth, where they will stop or pause to see and not pass you by.
I have journeyed long young Bard and many have I seen, and spoken to.
I found out that I had borrowed a body all those years ago, that was taught English, with a broad Wiltshire accent.
I was thinking with that voice yesterday, and if you really feel, to find that voice, then you begin to wonder is it just a pattern.
Tiny, tiny electrical actions that turn the world for me to my original language, English, these are the same electronic actions that talk Spanish to some and a multitude of languages throughout the world.
Poetry a language of its own, but in many tongues.
Our understanding of what you write is not easy as we are individual, each to his/her own.
Your poetry is another way of talking to many, it is a flowery way, streaked with the ways of old, you just have to remember that not all understand the way your poetry talks.
That we, You and me, can write and read your words and understand all the others that read your words it is a lottery as to how many think and feel the way you do..
Be Patient with the world young Bard, that you have written should be good enough for you.
Take care young loved, Yours Ian.T

hi loved

this is nice. a little over-loved (overdone in loved style - (((smile))))

I have offered my edits in bold – I have bracketed those parts I suggest to delete

all imo

love judy

xxx

Just beautiful

 I have learned a lesson (of mine)
 as time rolls by
 some come and flatter
 others come to shatter,
 never mind the ones who come
 simply to ploy
 their idiocy to deploy …

remember only those
who (pass by smiling) smile (cos there are too many ‘pass away’s as is)
 as some day
 they too shall pass away
 then the reality of life shall surface
 we all will also pass (away)
 as we all, including me
 are passers by
 (read this message and with love
 and do say
 time and tide do not wait
 for anyone any way….) –  cliché

or, if you insist you might like to finish in loved style with the line
read this message (and) with love

xxx

of simple words, deep feeling, ingenuousness, a certain edginess and compassion.

You have here. Love this piece. It's also beautifully written freeform, incorporating form, craft and a feeling of spontaneity.

And good revisions.

Beautiful, my dear,

Such lovely wisdom! I always knew you were capable of great things! Only one suggestion: I would remove (of mine) as it is already implied and the removal of those two words would give it a smoother more even flow. Yes... I like this one very much! It is one of my favorites of yours!

always, Cat

You shine, my friend

Even a guy who is not much at free verse (me) can tell this is a good one. This says outright about all that I attempted to convey as subtext in "end of a day's walk". You succeeded and I didn't.
And now I think of all the folk
I've met along the way
those who hindered, those who helped
or tried to lead astray
....vs.
some come to shatter
some come to shatter
never mind the ones who come
simply to ploy
their idiocy to deploy.......................same coin, different sides...........................................stan

FEW GONE TO ETERNAL REST
TO THEM ALL
ALL THE BEST