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THE BEAUTY MAGNET

And with a look made of all sweet accord,
your eyelids invigorates your personality,
and looking inward you have a sharp ability,
but seeking your love I can't be able to afford.

I know the texture of your beautification,
you have a high target in all justification,
look at your lips and finger nail's coloration,
you are full of flamboyant looks in decoration.

in my mortal soul I have set up a barricade,
against sparkling queens that are like blade,
now you've already brandished your identity,
I'm now taking cognizance of untold reality.

I have heard myriads of unfortunate lover,
who out of sheer folly in love broadly hover,
now he is prey of loss; everything has lost,
I'm taking a french leave for thou art cost!

©® Onyinyechi Cosmos Etu

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About the Author

Region, Country: Imo State - Republic of Biafra(Nigeria), NGA

Favorite Poets: Late Christopher Okigbo, Wole soyinka, Maya Angelou, W.H. Longfellow, John Milton, W.B. Yeat.

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years 2 months ago

dear Onyinyechi,

I think you had a great deal of fun writing this poem, coz I had fun reading it!!! Your title and pacing are all good. the content is excellent.

*hugs, Cat

Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 2 months ago

Wow

Infinite thanks Cat. I love to write about beauty of a woman.

Ray Whitaker

Ray Whitaker

3 years 2 months ago

Fabulous!

My take is that she is just too costly. just where I am now in my life, perhaps you meant this piece otherwise.. I seem to know "costly" women.... a cost difficult to measure in positive terms.

I need to get out more!

Thanks to you!

Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years 2 months ago

Thanks Ray!

You really know it all. That's plain truth Ray.I appreciate you for reading through.