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BENEATH AFTERNOON SUN.

Leafless limbs shiver in the wind
overlooking their departed brothers
who lie below their times at end.
They blend now with all the others.

White clouds above rush all about
displaying blue between their traces.
And mixed within the wild geese shout
while they compete as their time races.

The small stream unseen until now
chuckles down at hill's steep slope
which loosens my stern brow
putting an end to my mope.

This season is ephemeral
a time of nearly constant change
which is seen by one and all
throughout the sylvan range

All seen beneath my old hat's brim
in the midst of a chilly afternoon.
Before the evening grows dim
I'll stay yet must turn home soon.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Rula

Rula

2 years 7 months ago

Always great

to read you Stan. Very apt use of words with internal rhymes.
I especially like how you've set the scene at the opening stanza with the shivering limbs.
I thought we need to use the word ephemeral in this particular part, have I missed something here?

S

scribbler

2 years 7 months ago

Hi Rula

More likely I missed something. I'll check and see