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Berated, and Belated
My parents were "venti" mentors,
my grandparents were demi-gods;
close families, and other associates
did influence me, against all the odds!
I've yet to get things, exactly correct,
so, the lessons I still try, and learn;
someday, if the planets ever do line up, right
then maybe, it'll really be my turn.
Don't get me wrong, I'm as "slap-happy" as,
any simple-minded man aught ever be;
the only trouble with that equasion, I've found
is that I'm much more, a complicated man...than, he!
For instance, my younger brother, Tony
had a birthday, on Facebook.....yesterday;
but, in all of my limited wisdom
I never said, what I sorely NEEDED to say!
So now, at 12:47 a.m.
after having, his whole birthday to speak;
I find, what I'm writing at, "twilight",
is what I should've said.....earlier, this week!
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Happy Birthday, Tony! love, Dave.
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
docmaverick
14 years 5 months ago
Maybe....
...it's my "slap-happy" character! Lol! And you're a "funny bunny", too!
Thanks for reading,
doc.