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Berated, and Belated

My parents were "venti" mentors,
my grandparents were demi-gods;

close families, and other associates
did influence me, against all the odds!

I've yet to get things, exactly correct,
so, the lessons I still try, and learn;

someday, if the planets ever do line up, right
then maybe, it'll really be my turn.

Don't get me wrong, I'm as "slap-happy" as,
any simple-minded man aught ever be;

the only trouble with that equasion, I've found
is that I'm much more, a complicated man...than, he!

For instance, my younger brother, Tony
had a birthday, on Facebook.....yesterday;

but, in all of my limited wisdom
I never said, what I sorely NEEDED to say!

So now, at 12:47 a.m.
after having, his whole birthday to speak;

I find, what I'm writing at, "twilight",
is what I should've said.....earlier, this week!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Happy Birthday, Tony! love, Dave.

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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docmaverick

docmaverick

14 years 5 months ago

Maybe....

...it's my "slap-happy" character! Lol! And you're a "funny bunny", too!
Thanks for reading,
doc.