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themoonman

Jan 27, 2012 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Between Ripples

An occasional gleeful vision of the crowd,
electrified;
does not necessarily constitute crazy.
"Touched a bit I spect"
whispered the reflection.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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13 years 5 months ago

Richard

It is always a treat to see you post. AGH this needs to be continued although I know it is a complete thought more on this would be nice
Chrys

13 years 5 months ago

Hi Chrys ...

That was my first thought as well
and I still may add some,

thanks

Richard

13 years 5 months ago

Richard,

I liked this one and as Chrys said there must be more to come but I could have seen more if only the water would stay still, lol, Yours Ian.T

13 years 5 months ago

Hi Ian,

Good to see you partner, be careful of those waves (lol)

13 years 5 months ago

Dear Richard,

This is a mighty tantalising morsel of prose and I want more! (Greedy, am I!)

always, Cat

13 years 5 months ago

Hiya Cat...

I've been toying with this one and actually have more
for it, perhaps it does need it ehh.

thanks

Richard

S

13 years 5 months ago

hello

the momentary reflection caught between ripples.....very nice. About the only way I cold see to expand this would be to add another ripple but I 'spect you have a better way in mind...........stan

13 years 5 months ago

Richard

I like the theme of this poem, but there only seems to be one ripple, it really needs to be expanded, as it feels like the start of a poem.

lou

13 years 5 months ago

I sixth the notion...

that there should be more to this one! I do however relish the simplicity and completeness of thought here. ~ Gee

13 years 5 months ago

I'm going to go against the flow...

... and say I liked its size. It is succinct to a fault. I like it as it is. wesley

13 years 5 months ago

Damn

Wesley doesn't like making waves that's a first lol.
The waters fine come on in and make some waves.
Sorry just had to throw another pebble in the middle of the pond.
Never did see that film "On Golden Ponds" Did they make waves, Yours Sparrow, Yenti is laying down in a dark room La La