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Between Your End
O son of man, born of a woman,
Your end nears, beside you it sits,
In your friendliest of shadows it lurks;
It rises and sets at your bedside.
Why then say cry me a river?
Why then feed the poor a pail of pain, and upon their ways lay traps of tragedies?
Why send the orphan away by dark?
Why hide the widows in the cover of despair?
O son of man, born of a woman,
The end you dare not seek, seeks you,
Seeks you, from conception
To the hour you're lowered to its hold.
O son of man, born of a woman,
On a path narrow over roily waters,
A lone sailor on a voyage
Whose name the way to the end.
O your prisoner, you, free!
The chains upon your mind unclasp.
This new wine pour upon your soul,
And free your spirit.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
chima ononogbu
4 years 6 months ago
Hi Teddy
Thank you very much for the flowery comments.
c lynn brooks
4 years 6 months ago
Chima
well now that was one powerful poem , I love the way you repeated you first line through out. the only thing I might suggest is a change of title to this wonderful piece of work your current title is confusing and I must say I passed this beautiful poem many times because of it's title. I do admire your work you put a lot of thought into your words and it shows
chima ononogbu
4 years 6 months ago
Thanks Lynn
I do appreciate your kind words and advice well taken. Thank you very much.
Geezer
4 years 6 months ago
I will echo...
Chrys' summation of your work and say that you have improved steadily as a poet with each and every post. ~ Geez.
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chima ononogbu
4 years 6 months ago
Geezer
Thanks for finding the poem interesting.
Asche Keegan
4 years 6 months ago
Dear Chima,
Fantastic and powerful poem! I love your poetry and the way you can paint a picture with just a few words. Amazing job. :)