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emma iq
Apr 22, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

bikini body

i've seen two boys staring at my chest,
and one teacher basically calling me out for wearing a tank top.
I was so excited to wear this shirt and all I get is objectification. Why do I do this,
to give myself gratification from the eyes of the prepubescent
or to show how i do have a body under the insecurity.
In the light when my eyes bleed from starvation
nothing is more important to me than my bikini body.

About This Poem

Last Few Words: i was going to name this poem bikini bossy do you like body or bossy better?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Texas

Favorite Poets: Janet Mcaddams, Renne Watson

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 6 months ago

I think that...

Mark is right, Bikini Body is the right title for this! I understand the subject and hope that you will enlarge on it in a more structured poem. You have the right idea! ~ Geezer.
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c lynn brooks

4 years 6 months ago

emma

break tyour words into stanzas . I will be back to read. I do like the title Bikini body better

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

4 years 6 months ago

hello Emma,

suggestion: respond to those who are kind enough to read your poetry and leave comments. it is the polite thing to do. I am looking forward to reading more from you!

always, Cat

I see that not only have you responded, you have revised your poem- very nice...a good read!

always, Cat

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scribbler

4 years 6 months ago

yep

Body is the better of the two, I think your poem helps people realize what those "perfect body" people go through. I know I'm not happy with My bikini body lol

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emma iq

4 years 5 months ago

I'm definitely not a

I'm definitely not a "perfect body" at all. the" starving eyes "
are from anorexia what people don't see
but that isn't the central idea
of my poem it would be off topic
to go into detail

lovedly

lovedly

4 years 5 months ago

no bikini body is perfect but privately many see me (lol)kidding

prepubescent as you say
a guy posted this word
prepubescent+sachh==you know what
he used mango yellow juice to wash
and many did he attract

so each one for one's self
enjoy god gifted '''bosses'''
as you say vs body like
both you may
all guys will always have something to say
just say nay
politely tho

don't give up anyway
hurray
on this site to show
there is no way