Anthony Scoble

Jul 14, 2024 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Birdcage

I am at the bottom of the birdcage
Just laying in the grit
Feeling snug and warm
Coz I'm a piece of shit

I'm at the bottom of the birdcage
Why don't you come and sit
Not one person will bother us
Coz they can't handle it

I'm at the bottom of the birdcage
It's where I spend my time
Alone in my thought no pardons sought
Smoking reefer so sublime

I'm sitting in this birdcage
But what no-one can see
For growing in this birdcage
Is my own poet's tree

A.c.scoble

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I penned this thinking about my mis-spent teenage years

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Dorset England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Longfellow , Tenisson , Lear , The wee Glasgow poet

Comments

neopoet

1 year ago

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Ruby Lord

1 year ago

I enjoyed your poem, it has a

I enjoyed your poem, it has a good flow and I liked the story.
I see this is your first post here? Welcome.

The only tiny bit that I found a little peculiar was this line:

Smoking reefer so sublime - I think it's the meter that is not as effective here?

Perhaps,
Smoking reefer is no crime

I hope this helps? Ruby :) xx

RoseBlack

1 year ago

Welcome to Neo

Excellent start and first write. I think I have been at the bottom of a birdcage a time or two. Glad you are finding your way through poetry! Looking forward to reading more from you.

Lavender

1 year ago

Birdcage

Hello, Anthony,
Welcome to Neopoet! I enjoyed this short and sassy poem. It has a nice kick to it! Look forward to reading more of your work!
Thank you,
Lavender

Triskelion

1 year ago

Smoking...

...a reefer sublime... you piece of shit..
(..hope you get the joke...)

Thomas

Candlewitch

1 year ago

Hello,

Welcome to Neopoet, I am glad that you have joined our community of poets! I enjoyed your poem. I hope you will post more, soon.

*hugs, Cat