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the bit and trod of the savage petunia

pinch of gloss
smidge of sparkle
tongue lubricantly worn
tits tissued
shoes a-bladed
spread cheeks vaselined
rubbers tallied
picture kissed

prelude to a moonlight glow

she is called Kiko
to the tourists
that pay

she is called Lola
L-O-L-A
Lola
to the sailors
that get it

any night at port
every dollar spent
is a story untold

hell...
would you?

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

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Region, Country: Austin, TX, USA

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weirdelf

weirdelf

12 years 9 months ago

what a bloody brilliant title! You've got a knack for that,

and it's an important one.
So glad to see you posting again.

Narrative and imagery brave and effective. I question the last two lines. It could be said more elegantly or even deleted. Presuming the
"L-O-L-A
Lola"
refers to "The Kinks" song about a transvestite, the reference may be lost to many, perhaps you could infer it in the text?