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The Bitter Pill

If ignorance is a disease,
don't let it fester!
Swallow the bitter pill of truth
dispell the false praises.
The honey-sweet lies given
to stroke your pride,
the poison that you took
to feed your self-indulgence
will not make you wiser.
It is halting you from becoming
the man that you must be,
one who deserves acknowledgement,
someone who is willing to strive
in the process of learning,
a man who has faced honesty
with such humiity that he benefits
from the experience

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: singapore, SGP

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Sarojini Naidu and friends in Neopoet.

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Comments

Sparrow

Sparrow

10 years 2 months ago

Alid

As Raj said this was a short truth of things and well written,
Yours as always, Ian

alidzain

alidzain

10 years 2 months ago

Hi Wes

still trying to improve on this one. What do you think about the new edits?

Alid

wesley snow

wesley snow

10 years 2 months ago

A little more fleshed out.

Better. Watch your line length. Some are considerably longer than the poem in general. Even in verso libre consistency is important.