lou

Aug 17, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Bizarre

Blind folded feeling my way
strange sensations
sharp scratches,
pricking indecision.

Bizarre trepidation
feted remains of consciousness,
shards of terror
severing.

Lifting the veil,
quiescent power,
endowed with uncharted
depths.

Conquer the demons
gnawing at my resolution.
I will prevail.
strike the walls down.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West London, GBR

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda , Jack Kerouac, Alan Ginsberg, D.H Lawrence, Jim Morrison's lyrics,

Comments

Geezer

14 years 1 month ago

I am...

impressed! Wow! I see this as perfect, just as it is! Sorry I didn't make it to your chat Sat. I had to work. I wish that the hours didn't separate us so. i would liked to have been there. Were there many people there? My chat consisted of me and Press, and he didn't show until about 9:15 p.m. Oh well, I think things will pick up in late fall, early winter, when people start staying home and inside more. ~ Love ya, Gee

lou

14 years 1 month ago

Gee

I've been meaning to get in touch, the time difference is a pain. I feel terrible that I missed your chat. My chat was ok there were around 6 of us if you include me, things should pick up once people return from their vacations.

I'm glad that you like my poem, Dan tweaked it a little. I'll pm you later.

Lou

lou

14 years 1 month ago

Thanks Ian

Thanks for pointing out that I'm repeating myself, it's either premature senility,
or as I have known for while, i'm a bit stale.I need to find the next step, but It has to be a natural development. But my themes will continue to be up front and emotional in some way, I know that for sure.

Lou

lou

14 years 1 month ago

LMAO!!!

Ian you are a complete and utter nutter, but a I like that about you. Sort out the meds LOL !!

Lou

Esker

14 years 1 month ago

"strike the walls down"

must be a Gaelic saying or latin
Im certian of my Viking origins
(scot with red hair and fair eyes with my ojibway blood)

thats my fave line of this marvelous brave work

lou

14 years 1 month ago

Steven

Thank you, I'm glad you liked the poem. Dan helped me with that line.

Lou

Candlewitch

14 years 1 month ago

Dear Lou,

Conquer the demons
gnawing at my resolution.
I will prevail.
strike the walls down.

I do like the idea of this piece! We all have demons, don't we?

always, Cat

lou

14 years 1 month ago

Cat

Yes we do unfortunately .

Cheers

Love Lou

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 1 month ago

lou

The box that holds us, and stops our creativity. What's the saying: "The world is my oyster" yeah but first we must break the chains and shell that keeps us from it.
Enjoyed this write very much. it was easy to relate to in my own world.
Bravisima!
Eddie