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Jun 29, 2013
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The Black Dog
The black dog
caught up with me
darting from shadow
to shade, I see the
bloodshot eyes
of a rabid hell
he stalks with ears laid back
slowly baring white fangs
my legs turn to jelly
the end may be here
In silence I give in
walking into the mist
with the smell of death
permeating everything
there is no running now
no escape from his hell
I am bound to watch
as he rips at my entrails
my last breath is ready
jowls dripping blood
consume me
there is nothing left
nothing but .......
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This ones pretty raw any help is appreciated
Style/Type: Free verse
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years ago
Jayne
I have sent the dog catcher to take the fiend away.
In its place a cloud of butterflies to touch your face with powder wings,
till mornings of sunshine return to your darkish days,
Yours Ian.T
Seren
12 years ago
Ian
I can only say thanks for the read and comment, I will endeavor to write something lighter big hugs
love always Jayne-Chloe xxx
Ian.T
12 years ago
Jayne
off to bed NOW !!!! lol Yours Ian.T
Seren
12 years ago
lol
I went to bed but I was awake till 4am its all good I am going to wear myself out tonight then try and get more sleep tonight
love always Jayne-Chloe xxx
lonlyhrtsclub13
12 years ago
CUJO
Had a Stephen King flash back for a moment...very good
Seren
12 years ago
Smjle
So glad you took something from this one :) thanks for your thoughts
love JC xxx
scribbler
12 years ago
Hey Jayne
Pretty good poem for Halloe'een lol. Any particular reason for double spacing? Also yellow fangs might be more sinister than white..............stan
Seren
12 years ago
lol
The Black dog in this is depression, I always say that the black dog is after me when I am feeling blue, I am ok though slowly coming good, I agree this would make a great halloween poem.
I have two different programs that I use for writing, one of them automaticly puts the double spaces in
love JC xxx