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Blackberry Time
As the summer takes its will,
and foliage breaks its flush,
our dust edges come alive
thinning from there summer bloom
as black eyes seek the sun,
while cunning beaks take free feeds,
crown’s of thorns are no deterrent
as eagerly they seek the fruit,
Its now with bucket Grannies come,
charged with equal season life
to fill their Pails,
while prying eyes await ,
to take what’s left behind,
but a grandchild wont miss any strays,
as nectar bleed on a stick face
soap and towels at home await.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Just a quick memory that came to mind, nothing Heavy
Review Request Direction:
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Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Roscoe Lane
13 years ago
Beautiful,
Beautiful are the memories of washing faces in rivers after the feast, fingers that were surely died forever. Unfortunately the fingers clean up, along with the child. But for now i can relive it all again in your poem. gloriously lovely poem. Regards Roscoe..
believe
13 years ago
Thanks
Thanks Roscoe
believe
13 years ago
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scribbler
13 years ago
hello
Seems that picking blackberries is the same worldwide lol. They are fully ripe here now. You need to check your poem for typos which distract from how lovely it is...................stan
believe
13 years ago
Thanks
Thanks Scribbler, sorry about any mistakes, Im terrible for spell mistakes!