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BlueSkies
BlueSkies
Apr 16, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
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Blue Skies

Perhaps in another life, I'll be a bird
Roaming the expanse of the sky,
The forewind rushing through my feathers

Perching on a branch to ruffle
or enjoying a cool, stone bird bath,
Singing a song to myself

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I sometimes feel like a bird

Setting my own pace,
stopping to enjoy the green, green grass
when spring comes alive.

Watching a family walk by on the sidewalk
Gently waving, "hello, goodbye"

Breathing in the earthy smells of the woods
and exhaling life for the surrounding trees

I look up at the vast, blue sky
and watch an airplane soar overhead.

I wonder how small I seem from the stratoshpere.

It's wonderful
How grand
a simple life can be;

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: GA, U.S.

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Comments

Clentin

Clentin

2 months 1 week ago

Yhe, possible typo?

Yhe, possible typo?

I see your intent of the poem. Structure seems all over the place!
Welcome to Neopoet. Hope to see more poems. Keep writing.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 months 1 week ago

Hello Blue Skies,

as a new member, I welcome you to Neopoet! May your poetry find a home here. I see that your poem needs work but has potential. It is nice to meet you.

always, Cat

BlueSkies

BlueSkies

2 months 1 week ago

Candlewitch

Thank you for the warm welcome. It is nice to meet you as well.

Geezer

Geezer

2 months 1 week ago

I read and...

reread this and as I read it, I felt the bird in me, hopping around in the branches of a tree, and flying in that vast, blue sky. I began to see the way you have structured your lines with punctuation and spacing, making the line separate, yet related to the whole of the theme. Welcome to Neo. ~ Geezer.
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Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

2 months 1 week ago

Hi BlueSkies, welcome to Neo

Hi BlueSkies, welcome to Neo and thank you for posting your poem.
If you run your poem through the spelling and grammar check in your Word package, this will help with the flow of your poems. I find I need the little clues to follow the work. Ruby xx