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Booze Hound on Regrets
Booze Hound On regrets .............
With the benefit of twenty twenty hindsight
should I have stuck to milk.
Eaten my greens and taken bracing walks,
filling my lungs with fine bright air.
Should I have stayed at school
followed the rules.
Been a model son.
If I had married and had kids,
Oh fuck you I have to admit
I'd of been boring.
Eking the years ahead
I always wanted to be James Dean
and leave a good looking corpse.
A rebel or Marlon Brando,
but not in his final years.
With twenty twenty foresight
I see my self in an early grave
liver shrivelled like a walnut.
Bloated.
A cautionary tale?
Hell no take life by the balls
and shake it.
About This Poem
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Comments
Geezer
13 years 10 months ago
You can't live...
until you've lived. This sounds like too many people I know, including myself. This really set me to thinking. This poem could be taken both ways, as a true regret and in a state of denial, or as it reads. Just do whatever you will and worry about the results later. I can find little fault with how you have written it, just with the end result. Love ya, ~ Gee
lou
13 years 10 months ago
Gee
Thank you
love lou
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Dear Lou,
This sounds like me, before I changed my ways, LOL. I LOVE IT!!!
always, Cat
lou
13 years 10 months ago
Cat and Xena Snap
you said the same thing LOL!!!
Thank you
lou
13 years 10 months ago
Lonnie
Booze hound not me lol
Lou