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The Bottom Line

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Bottom Line [Trochee]...

A way IS the PATH that YOU take FROM me
I wish THAT it WAS back THIS way YOU see
FOR if I was IN love WITH you, YOU know
I could NOT bear TO see YOU go, YOU know?

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Did I get the gist of Trochee?

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: New York State - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Poe, Emily Dickenson, Robert Frost, Shakespeare, and many of the poets here at Neopoet.

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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

11 years 9 months ago

sounds good to me

I had trouble with this but think it came out ok in the end. Have you tried dactyl

weirdelf

weirdelf

11 years 9 months ago

this is the way Isee it

a way/ is the path/ that you take/ from me [2 anapests in this line]
i wish/ that it/ was back/ this way/ you see
for if/  i was/ in love/ with you/, you know
i could/ not bear/ to see/  you go/, you know?

mostly iambic

wesley snow

wesley snow

11 years 9 months ago

Sorry Geez,

but Jess is right. This isn't even close. I am suggesting to everyone that when you read it to yourself you "punch" the first syllable and then every other one forcing the rhythm. The funny sounding speech you hear is "non Trochee".