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BREAD
Another crumb, another day.
One more slice another year
as one by one time slips away
with loss of the ones I hold dear.
Until there's little left to chew
and few loaves left from times gone by.
Too soon the losses are nothing new
matters not the tears we cry.
Some loaves get toasted by fast living
others stay white from lives lived cold.
then some are cut too short by giving
better that than green from mold.
Today time ate one more sandwich
which has been beside me here for years.
Gone without even a twitch
a cause for more shedding of tears.
One day I'll see those other lives
and we'll discuss that baker up above.
as we reunite with friends and wives
and all those whom we dared to love.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years 5 months ago
Boy...
this one hits home! I like the images of old age and death taking their bites from our lives. One of your better ones in the realm of scancion. ~ Geez.
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scribbler
3 years 5 months ago
Hi Geez
You can be assured the scansion was almost accidental lol. As to hitting home I reckon all us old guys have similar thoughts
lovedly
3 years 5 months ago
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scribbler
3 years 5 months ago
Actually I read this before posting and after edit and
Still did not see this lol. thanks for eagle eye
lovedly
3 years 5 months ago
deleting
u know me minor points must be brushed off lol
scribbler
3 years 5 months ago
But
I appreciate it when other catch my mistakes
lovedly
3 years 5 months ago
OKAY
Shall catch you
FREE EDIT EH
SMART GUY
STAN
scribbler
3 years 5 months ago
sure beats
Paying lmao
lovedly
3 years 5 months ago
LOL
U R A GOOD PAL
Jackweb
3 years 5 months ago
Scrib Sparks again!
A good poetry is a contribution to reality.
scribbler
3 years 5 months ago
Hello
I am pleased you dropped by for a read