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Breath of Fresh-Air

I couldn't fathom to imagine......What's on your mind?

Imagining sights that dreams can't put into proper images

I'ma product unfinished, Like a story without a plot or premise

Yet I'm stuck in the theater trying to desipher the ending

Without a conscious thought..... Listen

EXHALE: words which flow thru air within carbon dioxide

INHALE= perplexed thoughts which are next to be exiled

Even though polar opposite,the combination so dominant

It's only right

So positive my polarity, yet those nay sayers surrounding me

My whole life

So when I launch my art like darts thru circles of critism

There's one point which will always be prominent &

Above negativity which is my nemisis

It's not really my expertise leaving non-believers beyond belief

So I'll end this personally thanking anyone who listens.............

These words are from a man who considers himself

A REAL LIFE SUPERSTITION

Peace

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Thank you for reading

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Baltimore/Maryland, USA

Favorite Poets: Langston Hughs / Maya Angelou / Nikki Giovanni

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Ian.T

Ian.T

13 years ago

eN eN

Your whirl around words flying out, try to hold them as a purpose and watch the Spelling unless it is to make a point bad words bad poetry, this theme can be expanded as a chest when breathing but not in so many words, Yours Ian.T

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Numero Negativ…

13 years ago

Thank You for your comment

Sorry about the spelling, I was in a rush and didn't get a chance to spell check.But this was something like a lyrical rant.Sometimes I just let the words go....I'm taking a writing class now so I'm working on my structure.My style can be a bit berzerk sometimes, I'm trying to contain the animal poet inside.Yet he's off the leash often.....

Peace