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Aug 31, 2017
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Breathless (senryu)
...drowning in deep love
breathless anticipation
suspended in hope.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: This is my first attempt at a senryu. I am hoping to enter competitions using this form and Sedoka.
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Not actively editing
Comments
Dooreen Cash
7 years 10 months ago
Breathless - senyru
Hi Mark
Pleases to meet you. Blown away with your comment. honoured you made it a favourite! I can see by your work you are a great writer I left a comment on your last piece! Brilliant!
Barbara Writes
7 years 10 months ago
Hi wonder senyru
Nothing to critique here. I have a renga workshop you might like to join
Clink the link in my signature and check it out
Dooreen Cash
7 years 10 months ago
Breathless - senyru
Thank you Barbara. I am on my way to renga! I am, however, writing for competition at the moment, looking for direction, on where to go for critique. Poem in first draft. It will be a Stanza. Can you help guide me to the correct workshop for this, or do I just post to stream?
Barbara Writes
7 years 10 months ago
Post to stream
There are several workshops you can join and and get valuable critique. mines is one of several types and styles of poetry writing you can hone your skills with
Dooreen Cash
7 years 10 months ago
Thank you Barbara
Thank you for direction....on it!