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Nevel
Apr 30, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Bridging the gap

In the dying light of your voice,
the sky wings away
silhouettes my bones;
I suck at marrow
of small gods
flesh the north wind, so pure,
inside my mouth:
the sun picks at my eyes,
gently

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: [This option has been removed]

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: Veenendaal in The Netherlands, NLD

Favorite Poets: T.S.Eliot, Sylvia Plath, Anne Sexton, Rumi, Hakim Sanai, C.S. Lewis, e.e. Cumming, Tolkien, Basho, Rilke, etc etc.

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Nevel

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Shirley, thank you for

Hi Shirley, thank you for your kind words.
Greetings,
Erwin

(a poem a day keeps the doctor away)

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49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

hello Nevel

great to see you here posting too.
no critique from me... I like this just the way it is.
.

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Nevel

14 years 2 months ago

Hi Juls thanks you and good

Hi Juls thanks you and good to see you here also.
Took a few days how this site works, so far I really like the whole concept of workshopping.
Erwin

(a poem a day keeps the doctor away)

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Nevel

14 years 2 months ago

Thank you Chez ....well, that

Thank you Chez ....well, that's a great compliment. Awesome site this, thanks for inviting me.
Erwin
(a poem a day keeps the doctor away)

CCfire

CCfire

14 years 2 months ago

No problems

I am so glad to hear you say that, I think it's a keeper too, won't be going back to the other one anytime soon other than to read.

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pleiades

14 years 2 months ago

how lovely this is

how lovely this is

from your wonderful opening line, i was
captivated
there's a delicacy about this write
that is very persuasive

it's introspective, without being
indulgent
it invites the reader to wonder

it's like a moment, stilled in time

completely enjoyed

cheers
p