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Nov 03, 2013
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Brilliant comment,,,now poetry
your brilliant remark as a comment
sparks my mind with a momentary lament... a rumored love story ...between a hubby and wifey ...they tried for years ...but she couldn't conceive ...and said if she couldn't ...at least he could....
times lapsed into poetic history.... she denied him of his desired curry ... yet he savored her from day one ....till she did him abandon ....gave only bed tea and said ....stay away from me ...she couldn't conceive she knew it ....a tumor since birth did she carry ...he was denied the elementary need of a hubby ...she denied it unknowingly
he had cancer later ...he could have lived much longer.....but was denied the last days ....of lovers plays ....till he decayed and died ....slowly passed many a years into oblivion ...we all call time ....
she followed not too soon ....but after another decade or so ....till her rumor turned into a tumor ...and doctors smashed their heads ....why did they not know.....
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Ian.T
11 years 8 months ago
Loved
You did read my comment poem then?????
As this is as good as replies get thank you.
Good write there Young Bard just a tad mixed up or was it just the way I read it,
Yours Ian.T
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Hi Loved! Your mind works in
Hi Loved! Your mind works in wonderful ways!
I enjoyed the read - I think it needs more pondering - so will have to return!
Hope all is well with you.
Love Mand xxxx
loved
11 years 8 months ago
as u ponder
my mind shall wonder
what lies in store
lest I am branded
a bore
mand
11 years 8 months ago
Not really sure what to say
Not really sure what to say about this one Loved - part of me thinks it's very sad - but on the other hand I see humour in it - it's a zingling mixture! But I enjoyed the read - it is funny how in life obvious things go unnoticed - and we just don't put two and two together!
I won't be around for a couple of days ( between Thursday afternoon - and Tuesday ) But I look forward to catching up with everyone's work when I get back.
Take care - and look after that Ian chap for me!!!
Love Mand xxxx