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Bunch of Needy People !
Misfortune searches for another like same
because misery loves company;
a challenge enjoys another challenger
but, needs a loser for a victory.
The wealthy really don't care for the rich
but, there are networks to be made;
the blue-blooded wealthy would rather ignore the rich
with the way they're always stealing the shade.
Complainers want something to complain about
someone else, must fit that bill;
the greedy are always hungry
but, they never get their fill.
Dishonesty waits for a victim
hopefully, one who's not regrettably broke;
the impatient shove to exit the door
apparently late for their next smoke.
The discouraged desperately need inspiration
but some would rather just sit, and mope;
all in all, we're a bunch of needy people
really, just grasping at hope.
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 1 month ago
I lke this, well written
You address serious issues, which I always admire. Yet I feel you left out a very important thing. The rich people's contempt for the poor and their need to make them poorer, so more controllable. Well, that's my soap box. I hope I didn't misinterpret your poem.
A crit
, "hope". [neither the comma or the inverted commas are necessary, I think it would be better without them]
weirdelf
12 years 10 months ago
Not much change in this revision
Sorry it didn't attract more attention.
Perhaps ask yourself why.
docmaverick
12 years 10 months ago
I'm thinking....
...maybe a little too much mundanity.
Well, jt's too windy to be hauling rocks.......and way too wet to plow so, guess I'm taking the day. off
Later on,
doc.