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Bunch of Needy People !

Misfortune searches for another like same
because misery loves company;

a challenge enjoys another challenger
but, needs a loser for a victory.

The wealthy really don't care for the rich
but, there are networks to be made;

the blue-blooded wealthy would rather ignore the rich
with the way they're always stealing the shade.

Complainers want something to complain about
someone else, must fit that bill;

the greedy are always hungry
but, they never get their fill.

Dishonesty waits for a victim
hopefully, one who's not regrettably broke;

the impatient shove to exit the door
apparently late for their next smoke.

The discouraged desperately need inspiration
but some would rather just sit, and mope;

all in all, we're a bunch of needy people
really, just grasping at hope.

— docmaverick, Aug 23, 2012

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Critiques

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 9 months ago

I lke this, well written

You address serious issues, which I always admire. Yet I feel you left out a very important thing. The rich people's contempt for the poor and their need to make them poorer, so more controllable. Well, that's my soap box. I hope I didn't misinterpret your poem.

A crit
, "hope". [neither the comma or the inverted commas are necessary, I think it would be better without them]

docmaverick

docmaverick

13 years 6 months ago

I'm thinking....

...maybe a little too much mundanity.
Well, jt's too windy to be hauling rocks.......and way too wet to plow so, guess I'm taking the day. off
Later on,
doc.

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