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A BURDEN OF COMMAND
Dear Mrs.Smith....or Jones....What was his name?
Too many letters I've had to write
until it seems they're all the same.
Oh Yeah! Mrs. Tandy, yeah that's right.
Another kid in my command,
Another name on that dread roll,
Another's blood staining the sand,
Another number added to the toll.
"he was a bright courageous man,
a friend to all who, chance, knew him
He dis and gave all a man can...."
I dare not describe his death, too grim.
God I'm tired in both body and mind
yet duty requires this much at least...
"He was unafraid of being kind.
I'm glad to count him as a friend...."
I dry my eyes from too much...dust.
i sigh and put pencil aside.
what words could this mere mortal write?
I'm not really a man of words
hell, I'm a carpenter back in the world.
"I share your sorrow for your loss......"
Nobody said it'd be this hard
I Hate This Job.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I understand that it was/is the job of a commander to write letters of condolence to the mothers or wives of men killed in his command. I tried to imagine what that must be like.........
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
tyro
6 years 1 month ago
I enjoyed the read. a nicely
I enjoyed the read. a nicely done narrative.
scribbler
6 years 1 month ago
Greetings
Another venture into the new "morphing" form I've been working on for a while.......stan
Eumolpus
6 years 1 month ago
a good anit war poem
as old as the history of man, somebody has to inform the family. How could that be an easy job ever?
After awhile i guess those who have that task handle it somehow...
But the poem, albeit formalist and a bit antique, has the message which is always true, and the writing is even and controlled like a good artist can make a drawing out of pen and ink.
scribbler
6 years 1 month ago
Hello
Yes, to have to inform loved ones of ever increasing numbers of casualties under one's command must have been heart rending........stan