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Sep 12, 2024
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Cage of cards
Chaotically clustered
cage of
cards covering
all
cynically silent
sides of life
plainly plastered
before my
persistently passing
presence of
the present day.
Thoughtlessly thrashing
out the leisurely
overlapping lanes
of possibilities
prancing through
the pressuring palms
of probability.
With a single stern stomp
taking back the cross
mask of control.
There steadily
stumbled down
the obliquely built
walls of ambiguity
freely falling at
my frivolously
fleeting feet.
Vigorously revealing
the vaguely vapid
valley of victorious
vultures who
persistently preys
upon the weak
minded ones
who decisively numb
themselves within naivety .
But still
I walk forth
ahead through
the foreboding facade
of fear
lying before me.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Now this I wrote a couple weeks ago I know it doesn’t haven’t any specific pattern or rhythm except for the alliteration . When I wrote it the idea was a person letting go of his anxieties and overthinking thoughts taking back control and facing the unknown.
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Lavender
9 months 2 weeks ago
Cage of Cards
Hello, King of Alliteration!
I love the build up throughout - cynically silent sides of life, walls of ambiguity free falling, victorious vultures who persistently prey. And then that inspiring final stanza that turns it all around with bold faith and courage.
Thank you, Edward!
L