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May 30, 2012
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Canticles and Candles--updated
CANTICLES AND CANTICLES
Canticles and candles
litanies sweet to the ear
incense like a serpent
dancing in the air
the holy kneel in prayer
mesmerized by the magic
murmuring of mysteres.
“Kyrie eleison”
“Lord , have mercy.”
“Miserere Domine”
“Lord, have pity”...
for we fear.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 1 month ago
mea culpa, mea culpa
I do like this very much, Joe.
I am a sucker for ritual and the piece is elegantly written, though the line
Ora pro nobis peccatoribus
unfortunately jars a bit, a pity Latin is not a more poetic language, eh.
It may not have been your intent but the last line really makes it work for me as an atheist, since I believe that all religion is based in irrational fear.
Geremia
13 years 1 month ago
Thanks,Jess,and I changed
Thanks,Jess,and I changed that Latin verse,
Joe
weirdelf
13 years 1 month ago
oh yes!
much better.
You didn't mention if you found my interpretation of the last line troublesome, I hope I did not cause offense.
It is a burden we must bear as writers, sometimes I have gone spare with frustration at misinterpretation of my poems. I try to remind myself of my anarchist ideal: once the poem has been released to the reader it belongs to them, to think of and read as they choose. But it's not always easy [smiles]
Geremia
13 years 1 month ago
see my comment.
see my comment.
William Saint George
13 years 1 month ago
Wow
This piece made me happy. That you left it open ended, was great also. I just loved how brief it was. Yet it seemed to say a lot also.
It was the title that drew me in, and yes, I'm glad I read it.
You've made my morning.
O and btw, I recently wrote a Kyrie for a latin mass. Awesome huh?
Geremia
13 years 1 month ago
Thank you. It takes a special
Thank you. It takes a special talent to write a kyrie as you have done,
Joe