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Captivity to Captor

The family stood up;
To break free;
Free of the chains of bondage;
Free from the cuffs that squeeze them;
The children hide in fear;
Hidden away in darkness;
To feel light will shine at the end of the tunnel;
To feel this word called hope;

Why were they born?
Will, we ever grow up to survive they muttered;
Will their life be different?
Their spirits weakened into time and space;
The days and months seemed to freeze;
Their voices drowned by the noises of violence;
Hoping to be heard, hoping to be seen;
But to no avail;

They grew up into monsters exuding hatred;
Lurking for a prey;
Parents scarred by torture;
Some died not knowing when and how;
Their children suffer emotional wounds;
The unseen trauma is seen too soon;
Won’t you share your story ;
To save a crying soul!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Hi everyone share your comment on how to improve this piece or perspective. Thanks much.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: South Zone

Favorite Poets: Maya Angelou, Beau Taplin, Nelson Mandela, William Shakespeare, Lucy Maud Montgomery

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Comments

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

Not knowing...

the inner workings of Trinadad and Tobago, I went to Google and read about the beginnings of your country. I believe that your piece depicts the beginnings of the slave and prisoner trade. I don't see anything that I can change without, upsetting the flow and demeanor of it. ~ Geezer.
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Warrior Princess

Warrior Princess

2 years 11 months ago

Geezer thank you for the

Geezer thank you for the comment. Actually, this piece was meant to explain the cycle of abuse and the children eventually becoming the perpetrator themselves perpetuating the cycle. It was not meant for slave and prisoner trade, but I understand what you meant.

Geezer

Geezer

2 years 11 months ago

I do see...

what you mean. Yes, I see it in my generation especially, a lot of men are becoming woke though and now the instances are fewer amongst my peers. ~ Geezer.
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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 11 months ago

dear WP,

I do not see anywhere to improve this piece. you have done well.

*hugs, Cat