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Mar 05, 2012
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CARRION LUGGAGE
suitcase rich
and heavy
thick with tapestry bold
laced up with history
weighted with years
with passion
dripping stained in lust
my tears fall upon the handle
when I'm at the middle of the lake
the moon soft and calling
when happier days our
lives did make
much happier now
the burden sinks
and waves ripple
caressing our link
and the witness stars
wink
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
wesley snow
13 years 4 months ago
Holy Shit!
Okay, I got this one. Rather disturbing, isn't it? This is why I read your poetry. wesley
Esker
13 years 4 months ago
Wisp of ache
pack up troubles in the old kit bag
and move along
nothing to see
move along
...
Candlewitch
13 years 4 months ago
Dear Esker,
very weighted poetic message! You do amaze... Loved the imagery and...
much happier now
the burden sinks
and waves ripple
caressing our link
and the witness stars
wink
always, Cat (& eddy)
Esker
13 years 4 months ago
some toss pennies for luck others skip stones
still others consult bones
and read cards by candlelight
or stare at the math of stars
for insight
and in the shallow of the night
the gentle voice that brings me
fright
"baby I need you...I'm so cold!"
Geezer
13 years 4 months ago
I was impressed with...
the use of [carrion] instead of [carry-on] luggage. Leaving the remains of a relationship to sink beneath the waves. Great image! ~ Gee
Esker
13 years 4 months ago
I knew of many that used the purity and depth of lakes
to cleanse to say farewell
I never threw anything into the deep as I believe lakes are alive
spirits I respect and fear water greatly!
I knew a woman though who lived out of her suitcase
and remember finding one on the side of the road that
was a travellers...why it was tossed I can only surmise
I have my own..heartfelt meaning items
Yes I wrote this dark
poe wrote his and straub and king
Carrion as in carry on...travel light I always said
we shant be long but lives lived
and dust we shall become
so Live in the still and breath
of today
Thank You
Nordic cloud
13 years 4 months ago
Potent story
"when happier days our lives did make"
This didn't sound like you, contrived to rhyme, no.
But you are having us on, with your big wink at the end :)
Nordic cloud.
Esker
13 years 4 months ago
splish splash blub blub
entertaining now
When Poe wrote his dark darlings they still were employing children
in factories and they were starving on the streets
there were so many
even know in our wild world we human animals
destroy beauty in what we cannot own nor hold
We would tear the sun from its moorings
and shatter its love for us if we could out of spite
that so much is in the psyche
it is the empathyic growth and heart that saves
us from the mass savagery
otherwise we would be long gone
obliterating ourselves out to the last long
ago
Like that you like this Ann
Thank You