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Feb 18, 2011
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Cascades
Cascades... flowing
tears trickling down
All the while going
down, down the gown.
Cascades... drowning
waters swishing together
And completely surrounding
My girl, named Heather.
Cascades... crying
her eyes moistening
From a sadness so trying
that I just can't help running.
Cascades are what they are,
Flowing like fingers across the guitar.
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scribbler
13 years 7 months ago
hello
a very heartfelt poem...................stan