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Rosewood Apothecary
Rosewood Apothecary
Jun 24, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cast Iron

Old Cast iron skillet
Black singularity
With all the density to boot

Home resides on blue flame
Houses newly hot oil
Now liquifying ginger root

Today some greens sautéed
Blanched well and set aside
Are darkened green, and crimson veined

While resting there they sit
Chicken is thrown to the pan
The searing sound, gourmet refrain

As the heat increases
Thigh and cutlet brown fast
The house begins to salivate

The sparkle of clean platter
Defiled by mains and side
Does lure me longing to my plate

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just a little something while I cooked dinner last night. It’s not great. I plan on revisions. Whatever input you have is appreciated.

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: U.S.A., USA

Favorite Poets: Emily Dickinson, Robert Frost, Walt Whitman. I’m enamored by the work of lyricists such as Robert Hunter, John Barlow, John Dyer Baizley, and Tom Marshall just to name a handful.

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Comments

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

hello again...

this is a delightful piece! the title is okay. but the body of the poem sings! it flows really well. it is a subject that I had never considered before...I love that you wrote about this from the Iron pan's perspective. you carried it off so whimsically. great work! (I love your imagination)

*hugs, Cat

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years ago

Aww

Thanks. It’s ok. I’ve been trying to write more about just observational type stuff. I do love my cast iron cookware and I don’t know if I could get certain results without it; specifically, like small beef loin medallions. I have perfected them. It was fun to write and I’m glad you enjoyed it. It’s a very different meter for me so it was good practice all the way around

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

dear Tim,

have you ever written any senryu poetry? I would like to challenge you to write a senryu, are you up for it?

*hugs, Cat

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

3 years ago

that's great!

remember you can write a senryu string (or chain) with several links(verses) thank you Tim, i hope you have fun with it!

*hugs, Cat & eddy

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years ago

All done

It’s all set. I’ll post it in the morning with my love and deepest regard for this whole community!

Jackweb

Jackweb

3 years ago

Nice Piece !

Apt yet very beautiful ! I love haiku poetry. It refrain from too many words and phrases. Thus, it is considered important to leave subtle overtones of haiku to the reader's own interpretation.

In sum, haiku represent the beauty of simplicity.

Geezer

Geezer

3 years ago

Cooking up some Haiku...

Traditionally, haiku is of three lines
the first and third lines are of five syllables
and the second is seven. But, we are not speaking
of traditional Haiku, and the restraints do not apply.

I like it as it is and purely for the differences from
regular poetry. As you have said; "It was good practice all the way around."

I did notice that you stuck to a meter of 6-6-8, [mostly].

There is one place where you did not.

"Chicken is thrown to the pan" -7
All-in-all, still very enjoyable, and it made me hungery earlier than lunch-time!
[Of course it doesn't take much these days!] Good stuff, ~ Geezer.
.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

3 years ago

It’s not haiku

But it reads like it. It’s actually 6-6-8. I might break that pattern but the first stanza was that and I tried to match. I’ll post a simple haiku I composed to the stream tomorrow.

Tim