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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Jan 30, 2021 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Cat Tale

I’ll put in a good word for you
when I visit Bastet,
who resides in her kingdom
along the winding Nile
I’ll tell her all about you

I’m happy to do this for you
because I am fond of your fondness for me
And the belly rubs too, of course!

When I return, I can lift your spirits
if they are in the black corners;
pull them back from the darkness

The Goddess sends her regards,
and thanks you for looking after
the children of her feline empire

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Not sure if the title's play on words is too cutesy, but it felt right in this case.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Gracy

Gracy

4 years 5 months ago

What a lovely poem, Michael.

What a lovely poem, Michael. I love cats, so you strike a warm feeling inside of me. I know about cats in Egypt, the Nile and so on, so it makes your work all the more attractive.
I think I understand your doubts with the title, it's a play on words. IMO, I think it's fine. All of the strophes are fine and so is the spacing. Hope you bring on more about cats. I have one cat, but have had many over the years.
Gracy

Michael Anthony

Michael Anthony

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks for visiting and

Thanks for visiting and sharing your thoughts Gracy! I only have dogs as pets now, which I love dearly, but some of the coolest critters I have known have been our feline friends.

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 5 months ago

My only criticism...

is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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Michael Anthony

Michael Anthony

4 years 5 months ago

Thanks Geez. I hear you about

Thanks Geez. I hear you about the use of fond and fondness. I was really conflicted about this as I was trying for an additional play on words along with the title. Some seemed to like it, but I may revisit in a future edit. Appreciate your thoughts on this piece!

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Geezer

Geezer

4 years 5 months ago

My only criticism...

is the closeness of [fond] to [fondness for me]. Other than that, I think you have captured the love of cats by anyone who has ever owned one. [If one can be said to OWN a cat] LoL. ~ Geez.
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