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Nov 05, 2010
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CAUGHT BETWEEN
The cracks of longing
and the tears of goodbye
The pain of losing
and the need not to cry
The realisation of loss great enough
to make you want to die
The dumbing down of knowing
that love has passed you by...
BB 5 November, '10
TITLE TAKEN FROM A SONG BY TOTO
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Comments
lou
14 years 8 months ago
Boni
Bitter sweet perfection.
Lou. Xx
judyanne
14 years 8 months ago
caught between
how i can relate
just the line 'enormous enough to die' threw me a little
can you think of another way to say this?
perhaps:
'The realisation of enormous loss
enough for one to want to die'
love judy
xxxx
Bonitaj
14 years 8 months ago
Hey girls!
Nice to see you all again! Judy - keen eye there... I edited it as best I could. Not ideal, but just a slip of a poem anyway!
CHeers
Boni