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Cauldron (eddy styx)
Cauldron
slowly it began to turn
a ball of madness
sanity on the burn
violence on every page
perversions wedge
to great outrage
humanity on the edge
and open windows
mounting the ledge
to plunge into fiery hell
to demons grasp
on the sounding bell
From scripture they'd been told
would redeem them from
Hell's fire bold
where was this bright shining lord
the one the fanatics
all truly adored
now nowhere in sight
on the precipice
of their darkest night
could it be true the scripture lied
out loud in vain
the people cried
great evil has taken the land
to its burning end
despite protest and demands
and so it ends on a sad note
of the reprisal
with no one left to gloat
About This Poem
Last Few Words: An eddy styx poem
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Kailashana2
13 years 10 months ago
Shit, girlfriend, you should
Shit, girlfriend, you should be in the meter workshop, show us all a thing or three.
C'est magnifique!
~A
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Dear Anna,
Thank you for the glowing compliment!
always, Cat
Kailashana2
13 years 10 months ago
*Glowing*? Does that go with
*Glowing*? Does that go with cauldrons and hell? lol.
~A
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Dear Rosi,
Thanks for the spelling help. I'm terrible at it, LOL!
I agree with your views on the secured holy place. I always enjoy reading your comments.
always, eddy (& cat)
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Thanks Lonnie,
I respect you and highly value your thoughts and opinions.
always, eddy (& cat)
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Thank you Chrys,
That means alot to me!!!
Love, Cat
Kailashana2
13 years 10 months ago
I swear I didn't see any
I swear I didn't see any misspellings in this the first time I read it. Does the eye correct sometimes?
Strange.
~A
Candlewitch
13 years 10 months ago
Anna,
Sometimes! I'm slightly dyslexic, so my eyes and fingers play tricks on me... the mind stutters, LOL!
always, Cat