The Causeway

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "The Causeway" explores a relationship between the speaker and an entity referred to as "her." While the overall theme and imagery are intriguing, there are a few areas where the poem could be strengthened.

Firstly, it would be helpful to provide more clarity about who or what "she" represents. Is "she" a person, a place, or a metaphorical concept? Expanding on this aspect could deepen the reader's understanding and engagement with the poem.

Additionally, the poem mentions a "stormy relationship" but does not delve into the specific conflicts or challenges faced. Providing more details about the nature of these difficulties could create a stronger emotional impact and allow readers to connect more deeply with the speaker's experience.

Consider exploring the theme of resilience further. The poem mentions the subject's scars and solidness, but it would be beneficial to expand on these qualities. How do they relate to the speaker's own journey or personal growth? Developing this aspect could add layers of meaning to

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everything about this one, except in the case of a few lines, I think the use of ellipsis is not warranted. In particular:
"But she has not shed even one."

"And once again, she'll lead me home."

Of course, I do not know for sure, the way you have thought the sentence.
I would rather see the lines both end with a period.

As always, you can use my advice or throw it in the trash.
~ Geezer.
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I love these lines:
I’ve turned my back on her more than once,
She has seen a lot of tears,
But she has shed not even one…

reading your "Last few words" about the causeway, paints a wet and windy picture. I am intrigued by it. I would love to read more!

*hugs, Cat