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Geremia
Geremia
Dec 27, 2014 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Chiaro-oscuro edit

CHIARO=OSCURO

The morning softly brings me to Day
and my Nighttime dreams begin to fade away..
In light's truth I see the years,have ravaged me..
On wings of fire I soon I will fly across a clear blue sky
and all my days of loneliness I will leave behind.

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Bella Cicerona

10 years 6 months ago

Very Nice!

Nicely done, Geremia! I like the rhyme, though it gets a bit messy towards the end (not sure if you intended that or not). The rhythm's also a bit bumpy, but I really LOVE the images you've chosen. The title fits very well, too. Keep writing!
~Bella

Geezer

Geezer

10 years 6 months ago

I will echo...

these sentiments. You leave beautiful images in my mind! Unlike some, I choose to believe that when from this world we pass, we will enter into the cosmos in some other form. I do not pretend to understand what will happen, only that something will. Have heart my friend, this is not the end! ~ Gee

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 6 months ago

Joe

If you want to fly then you will fly, there in infinity is infinity itself.
There is no end to all living things that are a pattern of energy.
Energy cannot be destroyed it can be changed, changed into wings, and dreams, there you will with all things be at peace as all are energy in a variety of patterns, it just needs you to perceive what you will, and love, then eternity is yours.
Grand write thee Joe just reach out, I shall put the kettle on,
Yours Ian

Ian.T

Ian.T

10 years 6 months ago

Joe

As there is no time in such a beautiful place the kettle is already on, lol
Take care young poet and walk with those that love you and wait for you there,
Yours as always Ian.T

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Lenny of Cohen

10 years 6 months ago

Lovely!

Thoroughly enjoyed ! Let us all fly and see what we can't see.

Geremia

Geremia

10 years 6 months ago

Yes. We all will know soon

Yes. We all will know soon enough, some of us sooner or later I can wait .Sometimes I think it's all one cosmic joke,

joe