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Christmas Quarreling !

I don't need a very, Brady Christmas...
and don't get me started, on that one about "ghosts"!

I want, my family's idiosynchracies,
not some family, for whom one boasts !

Growing up, there was our Uncle Johnny,
always irritated to the point, that he swore;

but, way before we arrived at our cousins,
we'd be arguing over, who gets the door !

What I'm sayin' is, it's only natural,
it's even documented, that reindeer can't hear;

so, Saint Nick simply had to yell orders,
and scream in "elfin", to make himself clear !

Promise me, each of you readers,
that, on your way.....you'll fuss over what each of you'll bring;

and help preserve, the true "magic" of Christmas,
by observing.....Christmas Quarrelling !

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: The High Desert, in the wild west, southern California, U.S. of A.., USA

Favorite Poets: Keates, Poe, Dickinson, and Dr. Seuss. There are a smattering of others, but why bother listing 'em all, ya know?, I also rely on a few of our poets, here....for advice, and what not. I couldn't possibly explain what a fountain of live, effective knowledge we have...right here in our midst ! To catch a glimmer of brilliance, merely visit: the Stream.

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Comments

themoonman

themoonman

12 years 5 months ago

Doc,

I like the content, it is one that all can relate to.
Why all the comma's? And here again the rhythm
is jumpy which interferes with the music in the
language. I didn't see the need for the exclamation
marks or the ellipses in the end lines.

anyway, hoping you had a good Christmas,
Richard