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Christmas Quarreling !
I don't need a very, Brady Christmas...
and don't get me started, on that one about "ghosts"!
I want, my family's idiosynchracies,
not some family, for whom one boasts !
Growing up, there was our Uncle Johnny,
always irritated to the point, that he swore;
but, way before we arrived at our cousins,
we'd be arguing over, who gets the door !
What I'm sayin' is, it's only natural,
it's even documented, that reindeer can't hear;
so, Saint Nick simply had to yell orders,
and scream in "elfin", to make himself clear !
Promise me, each of you readers,
that, on your way.....you'll fuss over what each of you'll bring;
and help preserve, the true "magic" of Christmas,
by observing.....Christmas Quarrelling !
About This Poem
Style/Type: Structured: Western
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
themoonman
12 years 5 months ago
Doc,
I like the content, it is one that all can relate to.
Why all the comma's? And here again the rhythm
is jumpy which interferes with the music in the
language. I didn't see the need for the exclamation
marks or the ellipses in the end lines.
anyway, hoping you had a good Christmas,
Richard