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city air

Your hair twists against 
the milky sun of a high window 
like the newborn snakes 
of a wild eyed farmer. 
or this is how it seems 

to me, one who can never 
move from the pulpit 
can never be fresh enough 
to rise and catch you 

your face moves in 
wrinkled transits of shadow 
each time you lean closer 
the shade thickens 

and I know what you’re thinking

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c lynn brooks

5 years 2 months ago

Pata

your first line is a bit confusing " your hair twists against' the milky sun of a high window ( this could be used as one line)
perhaps it is your phrasing that makes it such
the rest of the poem can stand as it is

Gracy

Gracy

5 years 2 months ago

I agree that it's confusing,

I agree that it's confusing, but then pataphysique is always that way. Enjoyed, none the less. Makes one go into a reverie.