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violet
violet
Jul 17, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

A clear mind

I'm just listening

The composition of beaded notes
dive at an angle aimed at my calves

Clear projectiles implode on my skin
slinking down toward my ankles

The rhythm is constant

Solid patterns

drumming

playing

trickling

A humming opus composed by the grey
leaving translucent tones around my feet

I could listen forever

The drenching sound
makes me
forget

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: GBR

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Comments

violet

violet

13 years 11 months ago

...

I am extremely flattered by your words. Thank you so very much :)

R

raj

13 years 11 months ago

Violet

I had never looked at the rain before as you have done in this write...that's the magic good poets like you create with their perception..vision and expressive words...a good lesson for amateurs like me...thanks for sharing this one...

loved

loved

13 years 11 months ago

It’s marvellous the rain let it come again and had it not been

It’s marvellous the rain let it come again
and
had it not been for Raj,
I would have continued to wonder,
Its ingenuity of a poet’s creativity,
To make a reader wonder
What the poet meant asunder...
Rain pitter patter at my ankles
Does render
Wow Ireally wonder
It’s your good fortune that
Raj commits no blunder

K

Kailashana2

13 years 11 months ago

I've been reading and waiting

I've been reading and waiting to comment. Your talent is consistent and considerable, I have come to look forward to seeing your name.

~A